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Potter
Joined: 04 Jan 2006
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Location: Michigan
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2006 7:55 pm Post subject: Premonition |
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I feel the cool sheet on my back. Im laying on the bed with my feet on the floor, waiting. Youve been in the bathroom for what seems an eternity to me. Likely less than fifteen minutes. Im scripting, saying things in my head and wondering if they will sound the same on my lips. Im turning myself into the man you will meet when you walk into this room. Sir.
I can hear faint stirring through the wall. Im picturing you in there stretching the material over your lovely hips, the slight smile at the corners of your lips while you straighten everything out one last time...Im losing focus. I stand and survey. The room is ready. Ive pulled the chair away from the small table and faced it into the room. Ive run leads under the foot and head of the bed. Four long lengths of raw ivory silk lay loosely folded on the bed. I handle the silk one last time, Ive been practicing knots. The smell of Jasmine wafts on the air with a hint of sandalwood, the candles burn steadily. Two taper candles lay on the nightstand not burning...yet.
Im ready. Black Haggars with a light-weight, dark gray sweater. Black Johnston and Murphys with a new shine. I took extra care in shaving and when we are very close you'll catch the scent of Jazz. Im ready physically but Im still holding counsel with my inner Fonzie. Im forcing calm into a mind racing with anticipation. I hear the knob turning...
Theres only one way to walk in shoes such as the ones youre wearing and you are walking it well. Across the room you know Im watching you. Your fingers go to you hair just above your ear, you look at me with what Im sure is the reflection of my own nervous smile. We stare at each other for a brief moment and a calm rushes over me. I place my hands on my hips..."Come here Pet".
In the ten steps between us I take you in. I know you look sexy and now I can tell by the way your lips are pursed that you feel just as sexy as you look. The latex that starts mid-thigh and stretches tightly to your form glistens and flows in the dancing of the candle light and with your stride. Up over your hips and to your chest where I can see how erect your nipples are, straining against the softness of the material that falls back like liquid over you beautiful breasts and up onto your shoulders. Theres a look in your eyes now as you come before me. The blue is nearly gone with your pupils so large in this darkness, your eyes are wide with the excitement that I know you must be feeling to your very core. I press you to me to feel your heat and to ease the last hint of apprehension. My hand sliding up your back over the smooth latex and then onto your skin, I feel you loosen. Then I put my hands on your shoulders and move you back a step. When your gaze returns to mine I know that youre ready, I know that Im ready..."Get down on your knees". |
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sinsazia
Joined: 04 Jan 2006
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2006 9:31 pm Post subject: *tingles* |
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is this before or after the dancing...?
Great job Potter. You paid me back for My 3.
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izcerlove
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Location: Chicago, IL
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Posted: Wed Jan 04, 2006 10:26 pm Post subject: |
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I really liked this. I'm not usually a fan of the first person present tense perspective, but you pulled it off beautifully. Hope you post more soon. |
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Camalus
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Location: Ohio
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Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 1:17 pm Post subject: |
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Lots of detail and emotion, I'm really enjoying your style of writing.
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uleedme
Joined: 14 Jan 2006
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Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 7:46 pm Post subject: awesome Potter!!! |
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you sucked me right in to the moment. however brief, it was wonderful to be invited it to eavesdrop and witness it. nice to see things from "his" point of view... to know what "he" may go through while anticipating - an angle i'm glad you pointed out and allowed me to open myself to. |
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